vox nihili

To the Star of Ithaka I love I dreamed a dream in time gone by, When hope was high and life worth living, I dreamed that love would never die, ...

This is great! I really don't have any edits, except the characters seem a little too courageous for ten year olds. Otherwise, there is nothing I can think of to ...

I have to say, this is lovely! A few edits: You need to go through and check for typos. There aren't many, but the few there are could easily be ...

I believe you have a very strong subject here. But the format isn't quite as strong as it could be. To me, it's mostly just a list of questions, "do ...

This is very good. The first criticism: it's way too much posted at once. I read the entirety of it only because it was so engrossing... (kudos for that!) but ...

I am grinning now, like some idiot described in the poem. One suggestion: try shortening it a little. Too much of this is really overkill. In the first half, I ...

It has a good ring to it, but I don't understand the point of it. Is it supposed to be illogical? Secondly, it is in desperate need for some simple ...

[quote="sHis chest was rising and falling in synch with his rapid heartbeat. 1 The grip on Derek's shoulders tightened as Rob forced his son to directly look him in the ...

Hi. I'm Vox. I'll be doing a general critique, and if I sound harsh--I really hope I don't-- it's just in the spirit of constructive critiscism, okay? Oops, I guess ...

[quote=" Then I joined a website, My problems began, You took the mickey, 1 I turned and ran. I tried to ignore it, To tune you out, But it started ...

Wow. After reading one paragraph, I'm itching to see the next portion! This is like the summary they'd put on the back of a book. Some minor edits to point ...

First off, this is all one very long, unregulated, difficult to read sentence. I think you really need to edit this before anyone tries to analyze the poem itself. At ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! I'm Vox, feel free to message me anytime if you want to talk about writing or have a question. Before I get started, one clarification: I ...

I watch the world around me, Random people of different ages, races and complextions. 1 Short and Tall. 2 Handsome and Pretty. 3 Sweet and Nice. 4 Odd or werid. ...

Ummm... I'm new to this form of poetry. You just sort of listed random thoughts? Is it supposed to be a non-sequitter? I'm rather in the dark with the purpose ...